Jisei = Japanese Death Poem in Tanka form – dVerse challenge

No longer breathing
But still you live for me
Heart no longer beats
I see no vibrant color
In this silk closed box.

Lips and eyes closed
Remember the good I did
Among the living
Bury me not with you, love
Let me love you til the end.

Thanks, Gayle of dVerse for the challenge it was complex, but inspirstional.

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19 thoughts on “Jisei = Japanese Death Poem in Tanka form – dVerse challenge

  1. kanzensakura says:

    These are so very sweet! Let me love you til the end….oh, how I like that sentiment. These seem like they just flowed off your pen and they inspire me.

  2. Grace says:

    I love this part as it is very meaningful:

    Bury me not with you, love
    Let me love you til the end.

    Thanks for participating ~

  3. Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade) says:

    These are very beautiful. I like how you express the two points of view.

  4. Watching the end of my son’s 51
    days of total suffering.. in my
    arms.. from time of
    birth.. heart
    beats go
    on after
    machines
    disconnect..
    one by one..
    until all his pain
    is gone.. yes i appreciate
    Life.. as we do not all receive
    that gift as LiFE.. BlesSinGs livEon..:)

  5. They stand so well against each other those two stanzas. And parting in love has to be the best thing

  6. Mary says:

    This is so very touching…..and loving!

  7. Sherry Marr says:

    I love the perspective in this, of continuing to love till the end.

  8. Raivenne says:

    Beautifully done my friend, the last two lines spoke volumes to me.

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